Wed Aug 28, 2019 10:41 pm
Paragraph 2 needs a comma after "Well"
Paragraph 2 "$24.95 digital vice $49.95 for one of the games mentioned above)" makes no sense, particularly the word "vice"
Paragraph 4 "with the AI, and movement" there should be no comma before the "and" because it's not a completely separate idea
Paragraph 5 "chrome comes in, as you can change" no comma between "in" and "as"
Paragraph 6 "tense contest because you as commander will " should be "tense contest, because you, as commander, will"
Paragraph 6 "times I need all of them" "need" should be "needed"
Paragraph 7 "Now combine that" should be "Now, combine that"
Paragraph 7 "At the beginning of the game each side" should be "At the beginning of the game, each side"
Paragraph 7 "In general these three cards" should be "In general, these three cards"
Paragraph 7 "At the beginning of the game each side" should be "At the beginning of the game, each side"
Paragraph 7 "bonus AP or two because ???Napoleon appears??? or similar." makes no sense. My best guess it is should've been "Because Napoleon appears or something similar."
Paragraph 8 "primarily for artillery, and easy to perform." should be "and is easy to perform."
Paragraph 8 "Click on a line item, a crosshair cursor appears for you to drag and drop over an eligible target and ???Boom!??? close combat occurs when your units move into an area occupied by the enemy, of which three is the maximum number that can so occupy." is an indecipherable run-on sentence.
Paragraph 9 "Really, that???s pretty much it as regards playing MEW." should be "much in regard to playing MEW."
Paragraph 9 "Interface is John Tiller style but with far fewer options." should "The interface"
Paragraph 9 "no zoom in or out, with only two maps scales" should be "no zoom in or out, and with only two map scales."
I could continue, but since I'm not getting paid to proofread this, I'm going to stop here. I'm convinced the rest doesn't get any better. This piece never should've made it to "print."